11. C Apostrophes
T\efortune belongs to Rowling, so possession needs to be indicated. An
apostrophe should be added before the s, as it is in C.
12. J ParagraphReorganization
While it is tempting to include interesting information, a writer needs to make
sure the information fits with the topic of a paragraph. The topic of paragraph 3
is the amount of money Rowlinghas made fromher books, not her movies, so the
underUned sentence should be omitted.
C Pronoun Cases
The essay is not written in first-person, /, oi second person, you. Replacingyou
with one, C, males the essay more consistent.
Commas should separate a series of dcscriptive words. By including commas
afber scrawny and black-haired, tb'e writer is indicating that Harry is scrawny
and black-hoired and. bespectacled, so G is correct.
A Big Picture Purpobe
Conclusions should bring the reader back to the focus and intent ofthe essay.
Throughout the essay, the writer refers to Rowling's magical life, and the
concluding paragraph completes that circle for the reader. Therefore, A is correct.
PRACTIGE SET 4
A Sensory Paradise
Give chores their dueltheyle advocaleg
put up a valiant fight. Thejjust could not
overcome the yearning for adventure and the
delight that laid ahead:
After meeting a friend for Sunday
breakfast, and I returned to my car and
pondered my activities folthe remainder
of the summer day. Immediately my list
ofprojeCts beckoned me, berated me.
therb due; their advocates
their due; its advocatds
their due; their advocates
breakfast, so I
breakfast and I
Insistent voices reminded me of housework,
responsibilities, and attentions needed. But
the lobbyists for my conscience were losing: I
could not be convinced to drive home.'starved
for adventure, I drove on rebelliously not
knowing my destination.
'Sensory paradise" was my journal
notation, as I described my perceptions uf
the many sights